Verbs
listening, playing (instruments), singing, sitting, looking, concentrating, enjoying, performing. standing, flashing, and talking.
Sensory Details
Hear: The instruments. The performers singing. The MC talking. Dead silence amongst the audience.
Smell: Aroma of food. Fragrance of the flowers.
Taste: The food on my dish.
Feel: The cold breeze exerting from the AC. The vibration from the stereos.
See: Sparkling lights, spotlights, instruments (guitar, piano, trumpet, saxophone, drums, etc.), flowers, the focus of the crowd on the performers, white coated chairs, plates filled with food, empty screen in the background, glass cups filled with water or soda, unique patterned clothing, disco lights, yellow and white napkins, and flash photography.
Hi Shaneika,
ReplyDeleteIs this a real party you attended? :)
Anyways, the details could still be more specific. For example: What specific instruments? What song? What aromas?
Note, too, that there are very few verbs...for these exercises, I want you to practice with putting the details into sentences with strong verbs.
Assessment score: 2
mrs s